Tuesday, August 18, 2009

My experience and goals in writing

My experiences in writing are mostly for school projects and assignments. Recently I have been keeping somewhat of a journal for my church youth group. In there, we can write anything about our lives, and what it's like to be with God. In writing, I would like to improve my voice and clarity of my message.
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  1. lsueokaSeptember 12, 2009 at 10:03 PM

    Hi Korie,

    Good writing goals—voice and clarity. We’ll cover both of them, both this year and next, as we work through the 6 trait writing process.

    Here are my comments on your writing pre-assessment: Nicely done! You’ve provided specific detail and established a definite voice here. The details and word choice establish a humorous tone for your description of this epic feat, cleaning the “forever messy room.” Word choice, such as “sifted, scattered, stash, quest…” and details such as the space only enough for someone with a “shoe size no bigger than 7” help to bring the piece, and your voice, to life.

    For your idea bank: some good physical details to convey your emotions…could have used details about others involved in the situation and about the setting/locations themselves.

    mrs s

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  2. KorieSeptember 13, 2009 at 1:49 AM

    Thanks Mrs. Sueoka!

    I'm not sure what you mean by "physical details" to convey my emotions. Could you give an example? I think it's that I'm not exactly sure by the word physical details...

    I understand the parts about the setting and locations, as well as other people involved in the situation as well.

    -korie

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